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Febuary 2001 Yabb Message Board Archive
Subject: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by old_dan | 06/03/01 at 18:40:04
Ok, I've been working on this for awhile. It says what I want but the structure is a little shaky. Mostly cuz I don't know squat about structure. Anyway, here it is.
Somewhere Singing
by Dan E. Monk
Chorus
When the day lay sleeping
and the sun hides from the sky,
when the song of the wind
feels like a lullaby.
I think of places I've gone
and things I have seen,
Lovers I have known
and times in between.
Verse 1
Standing by my window,
looking out the door.
Waiting for the sunshine
to brighten up my floor.
A year has gone, you've passed on,
the rain keeps on,
but it's not raining all over I know.
Verse 3
I have seen the desert sun
and felt the oceans breeze.
Listened to the quiet song
beneath the evergreens.
A song so clear and so sincere
now nowhere near,
But there's singing somewhere I know.
Chorus
When the day lay sleeping
and the sun hides from the sky,
when the song of the wind
feels like a lullaby.
I think of places I've gone
and things I have seen,
Lovers I have known
and times in between.
Bridge
But rivers all dry up
and mountains all fall down,
flowers will fail to bloom
and join you in the ground.
Verse 3
I will still plant roses,
maybe yet this spring.
I will watch the robins fly
and listen to them sing.
And they're singing somewhere I know.
opinions please?
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Liana | 06/03/01 at 19:09:40
Im thinking...I like it. It flows well bar the last line each verse...let me try something and get back to you. :)
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Liana | 06/03/01 at 20:52:29
Looking at the tense, chorus first two lines, also further down it gets very bleak if you have flowers dying etc...should be a little more...I miss you my love.....but I still feel your presence..check relationship between line to line to clarify what you want to say not what you have seen so much.
Shall send you something now :)
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Kevin | 06/04/01 at 14:36:55
old dan I think it's pretty nice. Two questions: Why the Chorus first and then the verse?
Mabye I'm blind 8) but were is the hook?
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by old_dan | 06/06/01 at 03:47:31
old dan I think it's pretty nice. Two questions: Why the Chorus first and then the verse? and where is the hook?
2 answers.
I have no idea ???
What's a hook? I know Captain Hook, I've heard of hookers :)
Wait, I know, it'll have a musical hook. Yea, that's the ticket.
Seriously, I'm still at a loss with this song. It's very important to me but it's not coming together.
Looking at the tense, chorus first two lines, also further down it gets very bleak if you have flowers dying etc...should be a little more...I miss you my love.....but I still feel your presence..check relationship between line to line to clarify what you want to say not what you have seen so much.
Well, the song is about death. I started it on the anniversary of my mom's death. What I'm trying to express is the cycle of life. You live, do some stuff and die. Yet somewhere inbetween there is meaning. There's singing somewhere I know. And if you listen maybe you can hear it.
I've come up with a melody now too. What I'm going to do is to drag out the old acoustic, plunk it out and post it. Maybe yet this spring.......
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Liana | 06/06/01 at 04:54:06
RU not getting any of my email...I have sent music file and lyrics etc ????????????????????? what is happening :-/
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by old_dan | 06/06/01 at 05:30:37
RU not getting any of my email...I have sent music file and lyrics etc ????????????????????? what is happening :-/
checked your email lately? ;D
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Liana | 06/06/01 at 05:42:21
Dan can you email me at Katziis@musicwriters.net my email is up the Uknow...I blasted the people yesterday about download limits and they sent a new UNLIMITED LIMIT as of July LOL 3GIG well Im sure a few people will be heading for the lawyers office with an 18 month unlimited contract mmmm
Subject: Re: Somewhere Singing rewrite (kinda)
by Liana | 06/06/01 at 06:20:33
I am flabbergasted!!!!!!!!! You are such a sweet heart....I have saved your re-write of my page, one of the gifs doesnt work but I'll work it out. Thankyou.
Have you heard my rendition of Somewhere Singing, its about to hit number one in Helsinki LOL...not really but You should have it by now