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Subject: "In The Wink Of A Heart"
by SexyRexy | 05/12/01 at 19:14:53
"IN THE WINK OF A HEART"
c 2001, Rex Poindexter, rxpoindexter@earthlink.net
(COUNTRY/MALE VOCAL)
He was believing
That he was only in it for kicks
She was pretending
That maybe... her headlight needed fixed
They were both playing a game
Both of them knew it right from the start...
(But) in a flash it all changed
In the wink of a heart
He was too busy
Trying to forget his 'ex'
She was too clever
To ever... confuse love with the need for sex
They were ready for a taste of some fun
When the lights came on for them both in the dark
The two became one
In the wink of a heart
Love changes your mind
Love changes everything
If you're lucky, love looks at you and smiles
Gives you a wink!
(short 4-bar instrumental)
He didn't want children
To come between their love
But after the marriage
A baby... was all she was dreaming of
When the nurse gave him his daughter to hold
Her little smile twinkled at him like a star...
He opened his soul
In the wink of a heart---
In the wink of a heart---
In the wink of a heart---
In the wink of a heart.
Optional tag:
He was believing
That he was only in it... for kicks.
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Subject: Re: "In The Wink Of A Heart"
by Ron | 05/12/01 at 20:27:06
Hi SR,
"In The Wink of A Heart" a catchey hook/title at first read, though personally I haven't heard of a heart winking. I think one would be in trouble if it did! :-))))
"In The Blink Of An Eye" would have made more sense to me.
v1 starts out well enough, but you lose me in the line about "her headlight needing fixed". What exactly is this referring to?
v2 These two lines caused me to stumble a tad:
To ever... confuse love with the need for sex.
When the lights came on for them both in the dark
*Also, this logically doesn't sound right. How can lights come on and still be in darkness?
I've made it a habit of late to always read the verses before I read the chorus or bridge. If the verses stand alone, as a story it indicates to me that the writer is on the right track. Your verses fell short in telling a real story that made sense. immhho This is very important especially with this being a country music lyric.
I noticed almost immediately that your meter does vary in v2 in comparison to v1. So, you must be following the plan that you refered to earlier in another critique. I would be interested in seeing you worksheet on this one. Do you have it set to music? And, if so did you compose it?
Bridge: This bridge doesn't do a lot for me. It sounds a little to "corny" for the lack of a better word. I love chorus's and bridges! They both give us the freedom to say something different, anyway we want. I'm afraid your bridge doesn't take advantage of that freedom immhho.
My final conclusion is this entire lyric needs more work. You took us from fixing headlights in v1 to being in light but in the dark in v2 to marriage and becoming parents in v3. There is not a single thing in this lyric imo that makes it stand out from the countless thousands of others out there. Though blunt, the truth as I see it.
SR, this is just my opinion. I am just another moron with a mouse. Others probably will see it differently. I have made a bad call only once before. :-O)))
Ron
Subject: Re: "In The Wink Of A Heart"
by Rex Poindexter | 05/13/01 at 12:29:35
Well, let me 'splain it to you Lucy', as Reeky often said on "I Love Lucy"...
You're right: hearts don't wink. They also don't go through Total Eclipses, or Lie, or Break, do they? It's a metaphor for an emotion, maybe it works for you, maybe it doesn't. But it's a metaphor. An intentional one, a WINK of a heart says something different that a blink-of-an-eye, or even a wink-of-an-eye... it's meant to create a certain playful feeling and a sudden change in attitude...
The 'lights' metaphor is one I use in all three verses. In the first verse, the car headlight that maybe needed fixed is a RUSE she uses to get his attention in the 'game' of love they are playing. Second verse, the lights-came-on-for- them-both-in-the-dark is a REALIZATION that they are falling in love. Third verse, the twinkling star-smile is the glimpse of light , the FLASH of insight that has him fall-in-love all over again, with the idea of being a father to this little girl.
The bridge is built specifically to deal head-on with any confusion about Hearts Winking. That's why I first personify 'love', then give it eyes, then have it wink. It also serves to summarize the theme...
So, that's the Cliff's Notes version. Make more sense now? I know it's sometimes difficult for ALL of us to grasp any subleties in a lyric from one quick-read. usually we aren't expecting much subtlety anyways... but I think the story is sketched in and the secondary subleties are there to give depth and reward repeated listens.
--SexyRexy :^)
Subject: Re: "In The Wink Of A Heart"
by Ron | 05/13/01 at 18:27:59
Hi Rex,
I turned my headlights on and was blinded by the dark!
Thanks for the expo.
Are we having fun yet? :-O}}}
Good Luck!
Ron