Subject: Please Critique-- "Again Tonight"
Posted by: Holland |
If you have never been through something like this it might not hit home.
It is done in E minor and there is a short musical break in between verses.
"Again Tonight"
Tonight alone the pain will come to me
I feel the rush as tears stream in
I sit and stare at the broken agony
that dwells within
but I know that your mind's made up
the life I had planned has just been undercut
So I'll sit here thinking of you
Again tonight
I fall asleep to escape from the pain
the void inside will detach what is real
you will never imagine what this has done
or how I feel
I need to make all the memories last
the last few years slipped by just a little fast
So I'll sit and take it all apart
again tonight
I stay awake to escape from the dreams
the time alone only hardens my soul
I always thought that we'd be together as we
grew older
I try to stare down the source of the pain
the fact that it comes from within drives me insane
So I'll sit here dreaming of you
Again tonight
I take a cue from the sound of the rain
I make it last as I reach for the phone
I try to replay it over and over again
when I'm alone
I take a breath as it wears off
the last three years summed up in an after thought
So I'll sit here thinking of you
Again tonight
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Thanks for reading
Holland |
Subject: Re: Please Critique-- "Again Tonight"
Posted by: keyboardfreak |
hi man, i love ya lyrics. i think you could do with a little bridge kinda thing just before a big climax for the last verse. that would be cool. i really feel for your lyrics. i wouldnt change any of your lyrics just keep them cool. one tip. make sure you have syllables in the right place and stuff (see my "THIS IS THE THING EVERYBODY DOES WRONG WHEN SONGWRITING"(or sumthing like that) post). i would love to hear the tune. over and out.
Rob |
Subject: Re: Please Critique-- "Again Tonight"
Posted by: AkikA |
GREAT lyrics. I haven't heard the song so I don't know where it has a lift or something.
I'm gonna mess a bit with the first verse(just for fun) don't get pissed please.
Tonight again the pain is here with me
I feel the rush as the tears stream in
I sit and stare down at the broken me
And the agony just grows within
But I know that your mind's made up
The life I dreamed you had undercut
So I'm sitting here and thinking of you
Like always, again tonight
This is just to show that I like the lyrics. Keep it up.
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