Subject: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Frodo |
Tried this once before and it went over about as well as a water-proof tea bag. But this time there will be rules
1. You can only write 1 line at a time. This means you can't post a line till after someone else posts one.
2. rhyming scheme: ABAB
Eventually it will need a chorus, we'll cross that rubicon when we get to it.
3. It doesn't have to make sense.
OK, let the games begin 
Line 1
Let's write our song together today |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: jamesbmitchell |
(PREVIOUS ATTEMPT AT SECOND LINE REMOVED TO MAKE ROOM FOR OTHER IDEAS) ;)
-- James |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Michael_A._Mess |
Let's write our song together today
We'll use our energy to create. |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Daytona |
Let's write our song together today
We'll use our energy to create.
What we leave behind'll never go away |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: old_dan |
Let's write our song together today
We'll use our energy to create.
What we leave behind'll never go away
It's our destiny lying in wait.
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Percy |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: distantsun |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: DGR |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
Don Rowe |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: jamesbmitchell |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
(Did I kill this thread again.. or is time for a chorus? or both?)
:-/ |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: old_dan |
Nope James you didn't kill it. This whole board has been slow lately. :(
But I don't think it is time for a chorus just yet. Maybe 1 more verse?
btw, this song is really getting good. Maybe folks are afraid of writing a clunker? I know I am....... |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: distantsun |
To be fair to all concerned, I think i killed it with the word "falter" at the end of my added line,
Sorry guys, feel free to erase and rewind.
I'll re-contribute when i think it through, and leave someone an easy lyric to rhyme!
Regards and Peace...well not quite peace!!!
ash |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Percy |
Hey Distant sun
I think "falter" works fine, as soon as I read it, I hoped someone would come up with "alter"and they did. We are just waiting/thinking up the start of the next verse. Hmmmm......
Percy |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Liana |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
hope Im in the right place, Im still looking for my brain...
wow...its great to see you guys again..I missed you |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Quigls2000 |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Quigls2000 |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move you |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Quigls2000 |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move you
let your minds dream to dream |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Quigls2000 |
[flash=200,200]sorry guys, i'm just getting used to how this thing works.  [img] |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: PeteC |
| You have the power to live your dream |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Frodo |
Sorry everyone, I know I haven't been around. Work schedule changed and I have been trying to adjust. Anyway, it's time to get this back on track.
And <ahem> Quigls2000 you broke the rules But it's okay since you're new
To recap:
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move you
You have the power to live your dream
With words to guide you true
Okay, time for the chorus! who wants to start?
ps- I showed remarkable restraint in not using the line:
We have the power to groove you
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: confused |
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move you
You have the power to live your dream
With words to guide you true
Okay, time for the chorus! who wants to start?
Chorus
one ring to find them and in the darkness bind them
Something in the way it sounds the fruits of my thought
Is that right? ???
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: old_dan |
To quote 10,000 comedians, "Is this thing on?".
Frodo, do you want to continue this? Does anyone? If not I'll let it die a lonely death. |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: x |
It's hard to come up with a bunch of one-liners and much harder to come up with good one-liners that work with other one-liners. But, I think they should finish this song and then start another one where everyone can do a verse or so and at the end we can vote on which verses we keep and the order of them. The same with the chours. No? PS, I wish the background color on this board was lighter, it's hard to read the text.
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: old_dan |
Good points x, I think you have a plan :)
About the text, how about if I make the text lighter? DanG likes the board dark, in fact he wants it even darker. |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: x |
| I like a light background with dark text best but, PLEASE do whatever it takes to make this board easier to read. Thanks. |
Subject: Re: OT - Lightening up
Posted by: jamesbmitchell |
Just want to put my vote in for lightening up either the text or the background. It would help a lot, particularly in low-light situations and on cheesy old laptops like mine.
-- James |
Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Jim |
I like this lets keep it rollin'
[note: I took liberty and restructuring the chorus to meter the phrases which now needs another 4 lines ryming lines 1 and 2 and line 4 ryming to line 4 in the first part of the chorus. If one of you songwriters would tell me what that is called in your ABAB or AABB lingo I would appreciate it- Jim]
Lets write our song together, today
We'll use our energy to create
What we leave behind will never go away
Its our destiny lying in wait
And if our song touches someone
we've managed where mortals falter
Where even angels sometimes come undone
... it's our offering upon the altar
Lets start with a simple theme
we have the power to move you
You have the power to live your dream
With words to guide you true
Chorus
one ring to find them
in the darkness bind them
The way it sounds
Fruits of my thought
Magic from my make-believe
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: Frodo |
Hey od, could you delete this thread or make it unsticky or whatever? I don't have the time or desire to continue and seems nobody else does either. So probably time to let it go to that unread thread in the sky.
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Subject: Re: Let's write a song (part II)
Posted by: old_dan |
| nap, consider it done. just wish it could have worked out better for you. :(
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