Subject: Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: whatcordisit |
This is the first verse of a country song I am trying to write
and Im drawing a blank ,Add a line or verse or just give me
advise which direction the song should take.
1. As I look in the mirror I see no suprise
2. There are lines on my forehead and wrinkles round my eyes
3. And I cant help but wonder what makes you love me so
4. I'm not the same man you married long ago
This is the first verse, start adding a line or give me a direction for this song to go. 
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Subject: Re:Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: lye |
Hi,
I will work on it, u have any rhythm or tone to this yet?
Thx,
Butch |
Subject: Re:Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: tommy taylor |
no I do not have a direction or music. However my group
does mostly country, so I would prefer it go in that direction
Thanks for trying to help , forward to seeing your
thoughts on this. Tom t  |
Subject: Re:Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: chadg |
Tommy,
the set up isn't really all that compelling IMO and sounds like the same ol', same ol'. Thus, probably not too many people are going to jump in and add lines.
This is a good exercise and can be thought stimulating, but for some reason it never really gets off the ground.
curious.
If you're in a band and would like to write...why not collaborate with some people and write music. I've seen some incredible, very polished lyrics on these boards over the years that are probably still sitting in hard drives because they don't have any music.
just a thought,
chad
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Subject: Re:Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: Frodo |
Ya, I have tons of this stuff too. How about this one:
She said she wouldn't write me any more,
but not because she didn't care.
She said she'd found someone new.
I know there's a song in there somewhere......... |
Subject: Re:Mental Block HELP by adding a line of your own
Posted by: jamesbmitchell |
Hey, Tom... sometimes I hit a block like this, too. Sometimes the block is really a sign that the foundation hasn't been laid properly for the rest of the song.
I think sometimes we write the message of the song as the first verse -- you know, the 'theme'. I think of it like the tag line for a movie -- that short blurb. If someone handed you this verse as the theme and said "Now, write a story that ends up illustrating this theme", what would you write?
Chad, who posts on this board, is really pretty clever at coming up with new ways to say old things. I'd definitely refer you to his posts to see how he takes a common theme and makes it unique.
-- James
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