Subject: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: Liana |
A new style for me, let me know what you think..there will be some fill in backups ...
Baby Groove ©Liana Steer 2001
Met a guy the other day
He makes me feel
Just the way
A girl should feel
When she’s a friend
He’s not the type to pretend
His mine his fine
He’s the best thing I found this time
He calls me up on the phone
Wonders if I’m alone
I say yes
He says guess
I should ask you out then next
If you say so
Then we should go
Dancing singing that’s why I’m ringing
Baby when you move the groove
Makes my body want to soothe
An akin breakin spent up heart
Looks like you're here to make me start
He’s so keen to make me smile
I say wont you talk awhile
Sing a song
Play along
Aint nothing we can do wrong
It’s a fine day
To go out and play
That’s a plan to make today
Baby when you move the groove
Makes my body want to soothe
An akin breakin spent up heart
Looks like you're here to make me start
I don’t need to pretend with you
What I feel is what I do
Its so good
Like it could
Be so right like I knew it should
Save my beat
Its so neat
To laugh together when we hit the street
Tag
Baby Groove,
Baby Move
Rock my world
Like I know you could
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Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: distantsun |
Liana,
It doesn't quite suit the posts from you that I have become acustomed to but, I for one am always interested in exploring new ideas (even if i never take them as far as i want to)
Heres the song piece by piece.
Met a guy the other day - Good, direct start
He makes me feel
Just the way
I girl should feel
This group lose all of the momentum that you built from the start. Also I presume that 'I' is a typing error?
When she’s a friend
He’s not the type to pretend
His mine his fine
He’s the best thing I found this time
His mine.... that line make no sense at all. Hopefully another typing error!
other than that there are minor niggles that I wont point out as i am not in a constructive mood.
There is however the template in there for a great track
Until again
Ash
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Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: Liana |
Hi Ash, I have not mastered the art of cut and paste and find it most distracting to have to go back and forwards here, so forgive me if I've posted twice by accident.
Now A girl is correct, thankyou for picking up the typo
One thing to keep in mind...my styles will keep changing as I sing new genre's so dont get too established with what I've written in the past 
He makes me feel
Just the way
A girl should feel
When she’s a friend
He’s not the type to pretend ( pretend he likes me just for a piece of the action)
I jump to a pleasurable feel.........ohhh
His mine(I'd like him to be) his fine(worth being with)
He’s the best thing I found this time
I didn't really write this to be word exact, more to sing in a foolish more childish bobby number like Your so fine you blow my mind..hey Ricki...but it does have to make sense so...
Until again.....niggle where you want, I appreciate any input
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Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: Liana |
I did a very quick record, havent mastered getting an mp3 into Cubase, so I had to play on one computer and sing on the other LOL...levels are bad but it will give you idea of what I came up with today when my friend dropped his "groveriff" on me!...must be destined to be together (the names so similar)
http://www.angelfire.com/music3/MusicDimensionz/BabyGroove.ram |
Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: old_dan |
Hey Liana, like Ash I like your other stuff better. The problem I have is it seems you're trying too hard to rhyme. Or maybe too many rhymes too close together, somthing like that. It's not easy to pull off and I appreciate the guts it takes to try new things.
So now I'll go off and listen to the song and probably have to come back here and eat my words.  (won't comment till later, gotta get to bed)
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Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: steve biederman |
Hi Liana,
I had to agree with the others lyrically. Then I listened to the "rough" recording. I've not heard you sing anything like this before (though I've not been blessed with hearing enough of your singing yet) and I've gotta say wow, you are versatile. The others I've heard of yours sounded so sweet and angelic and this one sounds alot like Aretha Franklin. Lots of sultry power in that voice here. Still, I'm not big on "dance music" but that's just a matter of taste in style so I'm not the best to judge this one lyrically. I know you get tired of hearing it but you would make any song sound great.You GOTTA be a star!!!!! Your fan,
Little Stevie B.
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Subject: Re: Call me Fool hardy
Posted by: old_dan |
Gotta agree with Steve, it sounds much better than it reads. But here's a couple of observations on the words.
Cliche Alert - An akin breakin spent up heart. I know you can do better than that. Too many folks have heard achy breaky heart. :)
I like the lines, his mine, his fine. Sounds funky. But I'd be willing to bet anyone listening to the song would swear you sing he's mine, he's fine.
He’s so keen to make me smile
The word keen distracts me. This may be worse;
He’s so pleased to make me smile
but it's the best I could come up with.
And from your reply to Ash's post;
He’s not the type to pretend ( pretend he likes me just for a piece of the action)
and what's wrong with that? :)
And please don't get mad at us just cuz we like your older stuff better. Remember, most folks don't like change. But music has to change, and artists with it. Course the best artists are ahead of the pack. On the other hand, you know how you can spot the pioneers? By the arrows in their back. ;D
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