Subject: Deeper In The Hole
Posted by: Gunstreet |
Fun, Up-tempo, Three and Half Minute, Country Song.
Deeper In The Hole
VERSE 1:
I know it's late
Babe, I made a mistake
I must have lost track of time
I tried to phone
There was no dial tone
It took my last quarter and dime
VERSE 2:
See, Bob was drunk
Locked the keys in the trunk
Helping this girl fix a flat
Her name was Claire
She had pretty red hair
On second thought forget about that
BUILD:
Oh, I can tell I ain't doin' so well
I think I've really done it this time
CHORUS:
I'm getting deeper in the hole
With ev'ry word I say
I'm not only losing ground
I'm digging my own grave
VERSE 3:
Babe, here's the truth
Bob split up with Ruth
I couldn't leave him there alone
What was that, hon?
Ruth called here at one?
Worried sick that Bob hadn't come home
BUILD:
Oh, I can tell I ain't doin' so well
I think I must have crossed the line
CHORUS:
I'm getting deeper in the hole
With ev'ry word I say
I'm not only losing ground
I'm digging my own grave
BRIDGE:
I got both feet in, still shovelin'
Still ripping up good roots
These walls are steep, it's getting deep
Good thing I wore my boots
VERSE 4:
It looks real bad
Darling, please don't be mad
You know I don't want to fight
And if I may
Hon, I just wanna say
You're lookin' real pretty tonight
BUILD:
Oh, I can tell I ain't doin' so well
I think I must have lost my mind
CHORUS:
I'm getting deeper in the hole
With ev'ry word I say
I'm not only losing ground
I'm digging my own grave
I'm standing on a slipp'ry slope
That's about to give way
And getting deeper in the hole
With ev'ry word I say
TAG:
Oh, deeper in the hole
With ev'ry word I say
Copyright 2002, Tim Baker, All Rights Reserved |
Subject: Re:Deeper In The Hole
Posted by: Aaron Cain |
If this sounds at least half as fun as it reads, this could be a song that could get cut. While i'm hardly the authority on what gets cut and what doesn't, I think this is light-hearted and fun and in the realms of country that is always good for business. Good Luck with it, I'd like to hear it if you have an audio file posted somewhere.
Aaron Cain |
Subject: Re:Deeper In The Hole
Posted by: chad |
Hi Tim,
I think the chorus is a real nice - straight forward - hook. While the verses support it ok, IMO it seems a bit contrived - convuluted - too many singees to worry about.
Simplicity (though fresh) might prove more effective here. Something along the lines of "that dress doesn't make you look quite as fat" (though don't go in that direction. I dunno.
Perhaps it's just me, but I thought all the characters made it more confusing than it needed to be.
chad
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